Editorial Report 13b

For this editorial report, I will be editing my conclusion. This will wrap up the essay and drive home the main points I want to make with this argument.

Selection from Rough Cut:

Choosing culturally diverse actor and actresses for movies is more important than we think. The amount of underrepresented minority groups portrayed in film and TV need to at least represent the overall population of the U.S. When it doesn’t, it causes children, like me, to gain a misguided view of the world growing up. These racial groups are much more common that the entertainment industry gives them credit for. And yes, while our children do attend school where these things should be taught, oftentimes movies and film are much more influential in shaping their view on the world. Casting a Black Hermione in an iconic series such as Harry Potter could be the first of many steps needed to take to get closer to the accurate representation that is so lacking in today’s entertainment industry. 

Re-edited version:

Choosing culturally diverse actors and actresses for movies is more important than we think. The amount of underrepresented minority groups portrayed in film and TV need to at least represent the overall population of the U.S. When it doesn’t, it causes children, like me, to gain a misguided view of the world growing up. These racial groups are much more common that the entertainment industry gives them credit for. And yes, while our children do attend school where these things should be taught, oftentimes movies and film are much more influential in shaping their view on the world. And why shouldn't we cast more varied types of people? Culturally diverse simply means that different types of people (with different backrgounds) will bring different things to the table when it comes to acting. And according to the #OscarsSoWhite movement, it seems like we've been watching the same kinds of people for awhile now, so lets change it up a bit. Casting a Black Hermione in an iconic series such as Harry Potter could be the first of many steps needed to take to get closer to the accurate representation that is so lacking in today’s entertainment industry.

For this editorial report, the content changed a little bit. I fixed some grammatical and spelling issues, and made it flow more smoothly. I added a little bit towards the end to make it clear what I feel and why I feel that way.

The form changed because I made it double spaced. This particular paragraph doesn't need any in text citations because it is the conclusion. I like how this looks now and I think it is taking advantage of the genre conventions. Making it double spaced makes me more credible.